Lady Penguin
Wishes To Be A Distraction
I'm a poet and I know it!
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Post by Lady Penguin on Mar 11, 2007 16:06:08 GMT -6
Mood Ring
My boy gave me a gift one day, It's quite useful, I do say, The present he gave me wasn't gold, Actually it was kind of old...
He gave me a mood ring, made of tin, The entire rainbow lying within, This way he knows, when I'm swinging moods, Which are bad and which are good,
When it's green it means I'm glad, When it's blue it means I'm sad, When it's purple I'm in between, And when it's red I'm kind of mean,
Then one day, a Monday I think, My moodring fell into the sink, I fished it out, it was still in one peice, But it was ruined, it's value ceased,
Now my mood ring's stuck on one shade of red, If he finds out it's broken I'm dead, So since it's broken, dispite all plea, Forever angry, I'll have to be,
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Post by Sharon on Mar 14, 2007 17:26:06 GMT -6
hey that was... cute! i don't usually describe poetry with that term but that was note: you ended this piece with a comma
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on Apr 3, 2007 12:34:06 GMT -6
Ha, cute. This made me smile "He gave me a mood ring, made of tin, The entire rainbow lying within," Good lines.
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Post by NotSoPerfect on Apr 8, 2007 19:13:15 GMT -6
word... i chuckled
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Post by The Brutal Immortal on Apr 23, 2007 16:03:50 GMT -6
heh, nice, i enjoyed it, nice little closing line
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Post by downwithquinn on Nov 17, 2013 10:43:58 GMT -6
That is quite funny. Some of the wording is a little awkward, e.g. "I do say" instead of "I have to say," and "despite all plea" instead of "despite all pleas." I can understand the choices considering they help with rhyme and rhythm, but they are awkward. There's probably a way to make the phrases work and still fit them into the format. This poem is a great example of irony; loving someone and their gift so much you don't want to disappoint them by admitting it broke, so acting like you hate them! Great use of this device for humor.
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Post by demonskeith on Sept 12, 2021 23:59:46 GMT -6
Lol, that is good and didn't see the ending coming. Keep the ring from any bulls as well
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