Gin
Contently A Distraction
drive yourself insane tonight, it's not that far away and i just filled up your tank earlier today
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Post by Gin on Mar 3, 2006 16:29:07 GMT -6
There once was a girl Named Sydney Squirrel Atop her head Were dainty curls She was ever so vain Yet shallow and plain And whenever you saw her, You wanted to hurl.
I don't really like the last line, I don't think it fits with the rest of the poem, but, if you knew the subject personally, you'd agree 100%.
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Post by Laura on Mar 3, 2006 16:36:05 GMT -6
Sounds like one of those chants you hear in the movies where kids point and say a couple of lines as they laugh ... heh.
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on Mar 3, 2006 16:39:00 GMT -6
Yeah, it kinda does...
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Post by Absinthe on Mar 3, 2006 17:02:44 GMT -6
Ahh, yes...well said. As I do know the subject personally (you know that), the last line is only so appropriate.
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Post by fightingirishman on Apr 13, 2006 22:52:08 GMT -6
Well, the last line might be better said as "You would want to hurl", but yeah, I thought it might be a bit short. It seemed like it was leading into more bashing, but it never did.
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Post by Only Me on Apr 30, 2006 23:57:35 GMT -6
lol. the subject must be a real pain. I know a few people like that. lol. it does almost seem like its going to continue but that with restraint it stopped where it was... good job.
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