There's Someone in my Bathrobe

[Laura]

a/n: I guess this could fall into this category ... I'm not really a humour writer but oh well. It's not finished and it needs work, but you can tell me what you think of it so far.

There's Someone in my Bathrobe

there's someone in my bathrobe
eating with cakey fingers
how he fits it all in is a question I ponder
daring to fight an answer
when he runs through the door
I hear a whisper
grab my make up and cake that on too
grubby broken nails
smearing on cosmetics
to make him look brighter
than the yellow coloured sheet

there's someone in my bathrobe
now unrecognizable, a woman
rushing outside to catch the air
before I catch her and call "thief"
he is lonely, but she is a star.

[thecrazybeautiful]

"to make him look brighter
than the yellow coloured sheet"

I don't know what it is about those lines, they just stick out as interesting. I like them.

And the last line I really like.

I think this is pretty much like a humour poem, just not as straight out and funny. It's got it's subtle-ness.

[Only Me]

ok. i had to read it a few times... but yea, i see the humor. its very subtle, you don't wuite get what its talking about until the end line "he is lonely, but she is a star" nice!