emilyjenk
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by emilyjenk on May 15, 2006 15:15:24 GMT -6
I love you-
But I find it difficult.
Why is this favouritism necessary
Do you understand the damage?
Yet it has all become so petty
& yet so serious.
Why do you never stand up for her?
When she is the one.
The one who will give you everything-
If you only let her in.
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 18, 2006 16:53:53 GMT -6
I don't really get this... I mean, I get the idea of this, it's just kinda short, and not really... I dunno the word. It's just... it could be longer and the feeling could be better developed.
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Post by Laura on May 19, 2006 10:26:16 GMT -6
I liked this part:
"Do you understand the damage?
Yet it has all become so petty
& yet so serious."
But I agree with Brandie ... I don't really get it. At first I thought it was about your grandmother favouring someone over you but then the ending took a turn into ... what? I'm unsure.
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emilyjenk
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by emilyjenk on May 22, 2006 11:30:11 GMT -6
The poems isnt about myself. Its about how favouritism has damaged my mother, yet she is the only one in the family who really cares about my grandma, who is not out for what she can get. I guess love is blind, especially when your children are involved.
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Post by Sharon on May 24, 2006 20:05:34 GMT -6
i think you should try to revise and add more to this poem. i really like the message and i'm sure a lot of people will be able to relate to it.
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