emilyjenk
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by emilyjenk on May 15, 2006 15:02:21 GMT -6
Thank you for your indifference It gave me my motivation, No nonsense, No, no point in asking a child what they want to be.
A pilot, a supermodel, an actress.
No, you didnt want to know about my dreams.
I understand. No need to give a child false hopes.
But this indifference caused me to fight for your attention.
I wanted you to be proud.
But you continued to remain indifferent,
Do you know that you have lost me forever Do you even care? I want you to know That your lack of expectations Still gives me a reason to try.
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 18, 2006 16:43:00 GMT -6
I liked the way the beginning came on so strong. The ending lacked a bit, but all in all I liked this.
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Post by Laura on May 19, 2006 10:23:39 GMT -6
I think you overused the word "indifference/indifferent" here. I would have liked to hear a little more detail. Maybe when you talk about your dreams - a pilot - you can expand or maybe not. I know it's about the person who didn't care but I like to see something more.
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