The Eternal Bond

[jigglytuffy]

I wrote this very quickly. ( at least in 2 minutes)

The Eternal Bond

A long winding road I walk
And there I meet a friend
We talk and laugh and play some more
The days just never end

It seems as though this bond we have
Is deeper than it seems
Because we are so close
You’d think it was a dream

Anytime I’m feeling down
My friend is always there
To make me laugh and forget it all
He always seems to care

And when he’s sad, I do my part
To try and make him smile
And when he does I know my work
Was all the worth while

This eternal bond that we both share
Is deeper than we know
But I just think of him as my friend
Our bond will continue to grow

[Laura]

"But I just think of him as my friend"

--this line broke the flow. You could revise it to fit better and still have the same meaning.

It's a sweet poem, not really my style, you know I get sick easily on sugar, but there's nothing necessarily bad about it. For the exception of the one line that doesn't flow, it was written well. Most of the rhyme didn't seemed forced, and it also fit well. Good job.

[jigglytuffy]

I don't normally write things like that. I had to for a competition. Thanks for taking the time to read it. I appreciate it.