the Mom I never Had

[Only Me]

[glow=red,2,300]I wrote this about my foster mom... She was actually my best friends mom and when I needed a home they took me in... anyway, let me know what you think... its still a work in progress...

You are the mom I never had
You come running to my side when I need you the most
When she wasn't there, I could always count on you
When she abandonded me, you held me tighter in your arms
You showed me love when she showed me pain
You taught me how to love, when all I knew was hate
You told me I was beautiful when she looked at me in scorn
You quieted my fears when she pushed me away
You told me I was something when her only word was "nothing"
You wiped away my tears when she didn't show up
You calmed my fears when I was overcome with life
You are the mom I never had
It was always you, and only you
Words cannot express the thanks I hold in my heart for you
You are the mom I always wanted
You are my mom in every sense of the word
You are my mom [/glow]

[allmeheart]

amazing, thats a wonderful poem, not so good that ur mother wasn't doing a very good job, but that u found some1 to comfort u, thats a good thing, very good

[BlueMoon]

That was really emotional, it was nice of your best friend's mom to do that, that shows what kind of person she is. It was really nice to read and I like it.

[QueenPaige4]

wow, I really liked that. It's very emotional. Good Job

[Only Me]

thanks ya'll! it is so great that we can get on here and get the kind of feedback that we get I really enjoy it

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]i really liked that one. i love how words are able to ignite emotions within the reader. thank you so much for sharing this with us.[/glow]

[Absinthe]

Wow. I really really like this one. In some ways I can relate to it. You did an excellent job conveying the hurt, the gratitude, the anger, and the love in this. I don't know if that's what you were feeling when writing this, but that's what I got out of it.

Fantastic job. I love all of your work.


"You wiped away my tears when she didn't show up
You calmed my fears when I was overcome with life
You are the mom I never had
It was always you, and only you"

That section really hit me, because I know what its like to be so hopeful and then to be let down....that need to cry is exruciating(sp?) sometimes. This poem really was superb.

[Only Me]

thanks ya'll your words always mean so much to me!

[emilyjenk]

this is an amazing poem and like the others i feel rather emotional at the moment.

My first thought was it would be good for the poem to have a break in the middle - so we could read more about your feeling towards your real mother - anger / hate / a desperation to understand her actions? Then I realsied it wouldnt work. That the poem is perfect as it is. The poem is an appreciation of your foster mother, not a means to calm your feelings towards your real mum. and between the lines you can see the pain anyway.

a brilliant poem