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Mar 11, 2006 9:40:25 GMT -6
Post by The Sightless Dreamer on Mar 11, 2006 9:40:25 GMT -6
I attempt to leave, and walk out the door But he throws me down and i hit the floor He begins to hit me as he calls me a name I scream, and the tears wash away all those dreams
All of my dreams with the exception of one Just to be gone away from his petty game He tells me he hates me as he slams the door he leaves me mangled there on the floor
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Mar 11, 2006 11:37:30 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Mar 11, 2006 11:37:30 GMT -6
It needs some work ... I think it could use some more. The last line of the first stanza doesn't really need the extra "all those dreams"
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