emilyjenk
Wishes To Be A Distraction
Posts: 9
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To Him
May 15, 2006 15:22:24 GMT -6
Post by emilyjenk on May 15, 2006 15:22:24 GMT -6
I do not care about it anymore what you did to me & these are not words of denial. I mean it this time
I can feel the indifference running through my veins.
Yet there is a part of me. A part I cannot control. & you hang over her
& sometimes you break through her defences.
I hate that you are proud of yourself that so many of you exist. I read about you every day in the paper. I see you on the news. You go by so many names
& disguises.
I wish you would go away But anyway I've somehow grown immune
But only for the time being.
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To Him
May 18, 2006 16:24:02 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 18, 2006 16:24:02 GMT -6
"I hate that you are proud of yourself that so many of you exist."
I like that. Makes me think of a little bit of one person being in everyone. Not too long ago I would always think about that, how people could have a bit of everyone in them...
Anyway, this is alright. With some work it could be better.
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To Him
May 19, 2006 10:16:03 GMT -6
Post by Laura on May 19, 2006 10:16:03 GMT -6
" & sometimes you break through her defences" --I loved this and I actually liked the use of the symbol instead of the word. Sometimes it works and sometimes not, but it's to your advantage here. " But anyway" --anyway should be two words, I think. It would make it sound more like but in any way instead of anyway, we're going here now ... you know what I mean? Good job
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lanaia74
Contently A Distraction
Posts: 32
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To Him
Dec 10, 2006 4:10:30 GMT -6
Post by lanaia74 on Dec 10, 2006 4:10:30 GMT -6
Totally AWESME!
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To Him
Dec 10, 2006 7:21:30 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Dec 10, 2006 7:21:30 GMT -6
I'm speechless
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