The Sun After the Storm

[Laura]

Remember tuning into a story of the ice age and just breathing thinking
"I'm glad to be alive, I'm glad our winters are long and our feet look the same"
I was hoping our identities would smudge together
and that night they did and our finger prints made a new pattern -
But just one pattern.

The light was like the sun coming out after the storm
and our arms all wrapped and tangled around our bodies -
Our bodies which are just shells for feelings and thoughts
wish we were words in a love song bouncing with the pen as it strokes us into lines
and then we become a part of history by copyright
and then we would always be in love without worrying about the devestation of time.

You are ageless no matter how old you get
Every birthday seems even better than the last
and you slither and slide all over me like I was the hut you lived in
and you shed some skin like all snakes do and a new one was born
and time flew by like whiskey and wine in the hands of a drunken widow.

so now you ask "Remember the ice age of me and you?"
and I nod and smile "yes -

weren't we beautiful?"

[ylime]

I really liked that. It's kind of a modern "carpe diem" type of thing. I love the second stanza. "Our bodies which are just shells for feelings and thoughts" is a great line. The love song part is nice too-- it kind of lightens the mood of the poem.

Nicely done.

[thecrazybeautiful]

"wish we were words in a love song bouncing with the pen as it strokes us into lines
and then we become a part of history by copyright
and then we would always be in love without worrying about the devestation of time."

That has got to absolutely be the best few lines I've read in a poem in a long long while. I like that whole idea of love without time, and of course you found a way to fit a mention of music into it

"Remember the ice age of me and you"

Great idea there to.