stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
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Mar 7, 2006 19:18:10 GMT -6
Post by stupidxgirl on Mar 7, 2006 19:18:10 GMT -6
a/n: I just can't seem to get this writing thing right anymore LoL. I am trying to write one good enough in my opinion to post in that contesty-thingy. I don't think this is it.
And I breathe you in on this almost summer day, this sunshiney goodness and flowery Paradise blooming from our fucking eye sockets.
You're the dream in the flesh- the mystery I never understood how to solve, but never honestly had the desire to crack open.
So exposed yet so refined and I somehow manage to erase the lines between the two and mesh you into one hell of a piece of art work.
(not that you weren't wonderful before, but my god you clean up nicely)
And I breathe you in and soak up the sound of our harmonious goodness and the heart pounding under your jagged pink flesh.
Your the dream in my head- the ever so haunting illusion I always thought you'd be-
So exposed and so juvenile I some how manage to be everything you swore I'd never be.
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Mar 8, 2006 16:42:38 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Mar 8, 2006 16:42:38 GMT -6
Wow. It's really good.
I can't really pick out a favorite part either... There's too many...
You started it off really good, and kept it up through the whole thing.
Really good job.
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Mar 9, 2006 13:24:36 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Mar 9, 2006 13:24:36 GMT -6
"You're the dream in the flesh- the mystery"
and
"Your the dream in my head- the ever so haunting illusion I always thought you'd be-"
--both somewhat similar and both my favourite parts. It's not my favourite I've seen by you, but it's still enjoyable. At times I was a bit confused ... but that's probably just the slowness of the day kicking in, I'm exhausted!
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