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Ageless
Mar 2, 2006 21:10:11 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Mar 2, 2006 21:10:11 GMT -6
he spills his guts my mouth falls out the words just flood down the lava stream I'm dying to live for you just want to show you how beautiful I can be
nothing comes close no nothing comes close to you.
dished to dirty to damaged running from an unknown face from hopeful to hopeless wishing you were here given up everything for nobody just wanted to show you how ageless I can be
nothing comes close no nothing comes close to you.
and I'm still swimming won't you come and save me?
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Ageless
Mar 3, 2006 15:44:52 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Mar 3, 2006 15:44:52 GMT -6
Ooh, I really like the beginning. It starts it off really interesting.
I like the idea of being "ageless" as well.
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stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
Posts: 229
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Post by stupidxgirl on Mar 4, 2006 0:27:12 GMT -6
I loved these lines "the words just flood down the lava stream I'm dying to live for you just want to show you how beautiful I can be" it shows a kind of desperation to me, and I am very familar with feeling that way. It wasn't your best in my opinion, but was still a great piece.
Bren
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