Stunned Me with a Prick Finger

[Laura]

a/n: for Stephanie

Stunned Me With A Prick Finger (I'll Never Be Yours Again)

where are you?
. . . . . . "I'm tangled in your covers"
I was restless from the night before
and my face was plainly dripping of lust
coming out of those sheets, it was like a new age
. . . . . . beginning, happening
I was birthing a new meaning for teenage emotions
they were spilling out the corners of my hips
and my legs,
. . . . . . he spread them so elegantly
I could have relived that moment every second
for the next five years and it would have been
. . . . . . perfect.

every time I wanted you to notice me,
I would just smile
you used to always tell me
. . . . . . "your beauty radiates when you're happy"
oh how it used to make me feel something more

and I would have waited for you
to come back to me
I want to know
. . . . . . do your sheets still scream of me?
still ignite your flames for my scent still travels through you
like lightning, I want to reach you
in an instant, we had evaporated
and all these pages of love and laughter

. . . . . . and learning to live

they have all been torn out and shredded

I don't dance because you have moved on
why don't you graze your bedroom for strands of me?
I could be lying there with you
. . . . . . if you wanted it
and I want it but you gave up on all of this
and I know you had no choice
and I wish you could accept an apology

. . . . . . if I knew how to give one

and I wanted to see you again
. . . . . . so I smiled
but you just walked right by me.

[Absinthe]

"I was birthing a new meaning for teenage emotions
they were spilling out the corners of my hips
and my legs,
. . . . . . he spread them so elegantly"


...I liked that part best. As for the rest, I don't know exactly. I like it, but I don't. Hmm....odd.

[NotSoPerfect]

I like the same part as Absinthe. And I really like the poem. It was concrete enough that I knew what you were talking about, but abstract enough that it was aesthetic and artistic.

[deadhunger06]

it was good, good use of imagery... although, there were parts that arent quite coherent with the others... still, the meaning is brought out qute clearly

[The Brutal Immortal]

its a good poem, it flows rather well, it keeps you intrested, and you dont want to quit until after you read it,i can understand the basic meaning of it, and can pull bits of the deeper meaning out, this is a good poem, i give it 4 stars