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Jun 12, 2007 22:09:51 GMT -6
Post by Cullen on Jun 12, 2007 22:09:51 GMT -6
another poem i wrote on oneword
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~` what can happen in a moment, this i know for sure, one can go from hopeless, to head over heels, yes this one is me, and yes it's you i fell for in what was less than a moment, less than a minute, and less than the time it'd take to think twice. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Jun 13, 2007 6:43:37 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Jun 13, 2007 6:43:37 GMT -6
Hmm, I like the ending very much. I think it's clever, and cute in a way. And I very much love the line breaks at the beginning where you leave the words one/to/yes just kinda hanging there. It's a good effect.
The only error- in line 6 it should be it's.
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Jun 13, 2007 23:24:11 GMT -6
Post by Cullen on Jun 13, 2007 23:24:11 GMT -6
lol, thanks!
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Jul 20, 2007 21:50:07 GMT -6
Post by NotSoPerfect on Jul 20, 2007 21:50:07 GMT -6
yeah that was pretty clever for sixty seconds! lol
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