Lady Penguin
Wishes To Be A Distraction
I'm a poet and I know it!
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Post by Lady Penguin on Mar 11, 2007 12:45:44 GMT -6
Empty Space
Durring the day this space is filled, But leaving it empty takes the strongwilled, When I'm at home where chaos thrives, This empty space calls, for solice it cries,
The days go by, the months I wait, To give up or not, my mind debates, This space I've learned, it inside of me, Something withen, and forever will be,
Inside my heart this place resides, It's a feeling I can't hide, This empty space is where my love is, And it won't be full until I'm his
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Post by Absinthe on Mar 16, 2007 16:03:22 GMT -6
When rhyming, do try to use less obvious rhymes. Things like "me and be" or "debate and wait" are boring. They are predictable. Try doing different sorts of rhyming....maybe rhyme the beginning of a word or the middle as opposed to the end, if you insit on always using rhyme.
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