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Jul 25, 2005 17:36:00 GMT -6
Post by haley13xoxo on Jul 25, 2005 17:36:00 GMT -6
unveil by haley
i wish i could peel all the layers off to unveil the real me show you who i really am insted of this fake identiy but the layers are so deep they're there to guard my heart protecting me from getting hurt so i must keep you in the dark until you can show me just how much you care show me that you love me and that you'll always be there slowly the layers will come off unveiling the real me and wen finally the last layer peels of i hope u like what u see and can love me for me
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Jul 25, 2005 18:45:36 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on Jul 25, 2005 18:45:36 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i liked the message you have here. there are too many cases of people feeling like they have to hide who they are to protect themselves from being hurt by people who are blinded by the standards that are set by society. my only suggestion is to run this by spell check and revise. good job. [/glow]
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Jul 25, 2005 18:58:03 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Jul 25, 2005 18:58:03 GMT -6
This had a good message, but I agree with Sharon, that you need to run spell check and edit a bit. Good job though and I'd love to read more of your stuff.
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Jul 28, 2005 19:43:09 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:43:09 GMT -6
yep yep, needs to be revised i think i like this poem though esp. the message, a friend of mine should read this...
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Sept 2, 2005 23:17:31 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Sept 2, 2005 23:17:31 GMT -6
I like it. I know how that goes, all too well... But eventually you will find that one person you trust and you will let the layers fall off and "live happily ever after?" or maybe not... who knows... leave that up to fate I am... I am happy right now and there is only one person in the world who knows the real me and loves me for it. for everyone else there is a black veil hiding my many flaws and qualities that i try so hard not to show. good work.
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