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Vanessa
Oct 4, 2006 14:23:16 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on Oct 4, 2006 14:23:16 GMT -6
For Jamey, who could give up liking her if I ever told him that's what I wanted. This pretty much explains it all -- opendiary.com/entryview.asp?authorcode=D378427&entry=20197&mode=VanessaThis boy speaks to me of a girl, but she just isn't an ordinary girl. She's got him face down in the flower bed wondering if he should pick daisies or roses, because he doesn't know if she's guilty or not. He closes his eyes and dreams of a girl, but she's golden when everyone's gray. She's got him thumbing through situations trying to see which outcome is better, saying hello or saying how are you. He starts to make a girl his priority, for this she must be something special. She's got him so sure of his decision about chasing her or being with me even though he knows she's so unreachable. This boy is quite close to me. He thinks I want someone else, and he thinks he wants Vanessa.
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stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
Posts: 229
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Vanessa
Oct 4, 2006 23:13:12 GMT -6
Post by stupidxgirl on Oct 4, 2006 23:13:12 GMT -6
It started out really well, but toward the end the flow I liked so much dropped off. But over all, I think you did a nice job "but she's golden when everyone's gray." That line is my favorite, it stuck out more then anything else. I'm not so sure why though LoL.
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Vanessa
Nov 23, 2006 21:10:55 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Nov 23, 2006 21:10:55 GMT -6
I don't know about this one. Something about it was just....off. I did like these lines, though:
"He closes his eyes and dreams of a girl, but she's golden when everyone's gray."
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