Who will we be?

[Desmond]

My first poem..

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Forgetting the tears in my soul
Forgetting the love that made me whole

On this day I see
Beauty across opened lines
More then I ever thought to be
Lost thoughts crossing my mind

Seeing you wipes my tears away
Loving you is it
So sorry to see this day
But still we are a missing fit

As I ever thought of the opened lines
The ones that cross my mind
And still on this day on I ask myself
Who will we be?

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¤Dez,.

[Absinthe]

I thought that was really good. It reminded me of something like wedding vows or the like. Excellent job.

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]first poem eh? not bad, not bad at all. [/glow]

[Desmond]

Thx you guys.

/me adds SD Points

[allmeheart]

i think its really good for a first poem, i liked it, made me wonder about my future etc.

[Only Me]

"Seeing you wipes my tears away" my favorite part becuase it is the way i feel every vacation from school when i arrive in Mexico to be with my husband. I cry myself to sleep every night that we are apart and the minute I see him until the second i leave, I am happy, in pure bliss...