My love, My life

[Angelamongsociety]

You are my love, you are my life.

Without you I don't know how I would survive.

I love you more and more each day.

If you ask me why I love you, here is what I will say.

I love you because of how you hold me in your arms, like you never want to let go.

And the way your eyes sparkle when you glance over at me.

I love they way you kiss me, so softly and sweet.

Also for the way you always seem to know the right words to say.

But most of all I love how you make my heart skip a beat.

All these reasons and more are why my love for you is so deep.

All these reasons and more are why I can't bare to let you go.

My love for you is strong and my love for you is pure.

Now please tell me that I am the only one you adore.

[thecrazybeautiful]

Ahh, where to begin?

"If you ask me why I love you, here is what I will say."

Seems a little overused. A little cliche'. I know it's really what the poem is all about, just... Well, I dunno. It just kinda brought the poem down a bit.

Also, the rhyming. It rhymed here, it rhymed there, but it wasn't consistant. Alot of people do that on purpose, I dunno if you did or not, but it just doesn't seem right to me. It kinda holds me up a bit reading that.

"And the way your eyes sparkle when you glance over at me."

I like that line there. I've always liked the idea of sparkling eyes.

[Laura]

"But most of all I love how you make my heart skip a beat.

All these reasons and more are why my love for you is so deep."

--way too overused. I'm not sure about this one ... it just seems too preteen lovey to me.

[Samccaleb]

Its mushy. I think that any minute I'm going to see little pink hearts floating out of my screen. The rhyming is ok if you are consistent with it. I know how hard it is to come up with rhymes that fit with your poem. God knows I cant rhyme to save my life so I give you kudos for being able to do it at all, however when you dont do it consistently the poems tends to have a choppy feel to it. I also have to agree with ^, some of your phrases are cliche and a bit over used. Dont worry about that. I'm guilty of doing it myself. The best thing to do is sit down with a thesaurus and a pencil. Find words that you like that sound original. Poetry isnt about conforming, its about expressing yourself in the most original way possible. Its a good start, it just needs a little work.

[Absinthe]

This whole thing seems kind of sickly sweet, hardly sincere, lovey-dovey. And it reminds me of the poem that Kat reads about Patrick in 10 Things I Hate About You. Same format. Different words.