Wish For You

[Laura]

a/n: here's my attempt at a simpler poem

Wish For You

I wish I could be the explanation for you
when asked about your scars
because if I put them there you could forget
just a mere piece of your heart,
nothing that could shatter you.

I wish I could be the stares for you
that wandering eyes give
because if I could suck them all in
I would turn the other way,
and swallow them.

I wish I could be the reasoning for you
opinionated bullshitters stupidly assuming
because if I blended them together
hardened them to my palm,
they would melt in summer.

I wish they would accuse me
I wish they could leave you out.

I wish I could be the hurt for you
clouding your beautiful mind
because if I turned it all inside out
wrapped it up on Christmas Eve,
you could open up your happiness.

[thecrazybeautiful]

"they would melt in summer.

I wish they would accuse me
I wish they could leave you out."

Those were my favorite lines there.

Overall this was interesting. I like the idea presented throughout the whole thing. This really is a simpler poem, but it's good

[Sharon]

The concept is good. I like how you've taken the saying "I wish I could take away your pain" and made it sound more interesting. The only thing that I didn't quite follow is the last lines but that's just probably me.

[Samccaleb]

I get it. I understand.
"I wish I could be the explanation for you
when asked about your scars.."

This really stood out to me. I think its because I can identify with it, but I have to say that this is awesome. Great job!

[Absinthe]

"because if I turned it all inside out
wrapped it up on Christmas Eve,
you could open up your happiness. "

....loved these lines.

Yeah, I'm a fan