Be Your Tattoo

[Laura]

a/n: written about "Footsteps" by Pearl Jam. If you have a chance, listen to that song before reading this.

Be Your Tattoo

I'd like to bury those scratches
reinvent you
scarf your neck when you're cold

but you're still sad
thinking of her.

the way her hair used to fall on your shoulder
and how her tears would roll down your cheeks
in a wintered summer on a back porch

somewhere, I was listening
to all your warmth sheltering her
how she never loved you

and how I always did.

keep breathing,
I will trademark this air
in your name,
I will claim this for you.

let go of all those voices
staining promises of loneliness inside your head
they will disappear
dissipate within my arms when I hold you

I wish you could have known
before your hurt
from her.

I will give you the sand
and you can make me footprints
you can be the frames inside my mind

there is no one else that can hold you
the way you held her
but me

and I'd like to heal those scratches
still stepping on your hands
like faded photographs
and empty reasons

I'd like to have loved you
before your sadness
and hurt
by her.

but I can still love you
just as much
if you let go of your shadows
and footstep into me.

[stupidxgirl]

Laura, this is amazing doll. I have to say this is one of my favorites by you honestly. There isn't one part I can pick out that could use work because it's perfect LoL. Footsteps is a steller song, as you know I am also a huge fan of Pearl Jam. My favorite parts I think are :

"I'd like to bury those scratches
reinvent you
scarf your neck when you're cold"

The idea of being the scarf around someone's neck when their cold is a real devotion to me, it's very sweet.

"keep breathing,
I will trademark this air
in your name,
I will claim this for you."

This was also very sweet.

I can't say this enough, I love everything your poetry stands for. I can relate to this piece so much right now and I'm sure a lot of other people can as well.

[thecrazybeautiful]

Wow.

"somewhere, I was listening
to all your warmth sheltering her
how she never loved you

and how I always did.

keep breathing,
I will trademark this air
in your name,
I will claim this for you."

I love that part. But this whole thing is really nice. You do great when you're writing about Pearl Jam

[Samccaleb]

Wow! I love it. This is ny favorite of yours. I understood everything perfectly and I got imagery from it. Great job!

[Sharon]

i'm a great fan of the message of this piece. unfortunately, i'm not able to listen to the track. it's very touching. i'm not too sure of the last line:

and footstep into me.

but overall this was a great piece. it's amazing how one can be inspired by a song huh? i haven't had that happen to me in awhile.

[Absinthe]

"like faded photographs
and empty reasons"

.....Love the wording here.

Fantastic job, Laura - as usual. You have such a unique style and way with words that I adore. This is great. I can't even explain why I like it, I just do....wonderful.