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Post by sagsdragonlvr on Apr 14, 2006 17:14:47 GMT -6
Distant Love
Everything moving so quickly All I think about is you Nothing else runs through my mind Even being in another country Makes me long for you even more
I wish I didn't love you the way I do But my heart keeps you there As it cannot let go of anything It burns with so much caring As though my heart was floating Above a bunch of flames
I see other guys who are attractive as you But there's always that part of me that lingers on about you And I can't help missing you day and night I keep telling myself I need to foret about you But your all I could keep close to my heart Everytime my memories with you keep relaying in my head The piece of me that wants to let go Will want you to go away But the side that begs for you to stay Al I think about is the embraces I long for
Though I know my dreams won't come true for a long time Yet I know nowhere I go you'll try to be there for me And maybe one of these days to love me The way I see see you do in my dreams
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Post by Laura on Apr 14, 2006 17:46:02 GMT -6
"As though my heart was floating Above a bunch of flames"
--this was a good image.
There were a few spelling errors and grammatical errors and maybe this part:
"And maybe one of these days to love me"
--is a part of the spelling errors because it doesn't make sense ... is it supposed to be "you'll"?
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Post by sagsdragonlvr on Apr 15, 2006 6:09:54 GMT -6
read that sentence and the one after completely after and it will probably make more sense.
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Post by Laura on Apr 15, 2006 6:13:41 GMT -6
I see ... I guess it makes sense but it's odd.
"Yet I know nowhere I go you'll try"
--the nowhere here makes the sentence weird. It makes sense but it's confusing.
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Post by sagsdragonlvr on Apr 15, 2006 16:04:06 GMT -6
this is me...cuz i didnt proof read it...grrr well take off the yet and put matter in that middle of no where. also i mispelled forget and there's only suppose to sbe only one see on the last line.
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Post by sagsdragonlvr on Apr 15, 2006 16:05:00 GMT -6
to be*
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