tecoyah
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Flowers
Feb 15, 2022 8:20:54 GMT -6
Post by tecoyah on Feb 15, 2022 8:20:54 GMT -6
You put flowers in your hair Powder pedals made blush with skin No nature will compare to the beauty within You put flowers in your hair Pale glory in your light It seems unright to make mother uptight You put flowers in your hair Color faded by a backgound of desire As you conspire, kindle this fire You put flowers in your hair but I can't see them anymore.
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Post by Sharon on Feb 15, 2022 19:47:46 GMT -6
Nature can be breath taking so this line speaks volumes to me. What a powerful way to end. Love it. Thank you for sharing!
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Flowers
Feb 21, 2022 19:21:39 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Feb 21, 2022 19:21:39 GMT -6
I think this is my favorite of the poems you've posted. My only quibble is this line here: It seems unright to make mother uptight It just feels a little out of place to me. Overall, though, great job!
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