trishriley
Wishes To Be A Distraction
I am a new mommy to a beautiful baby boy.
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Post by trishriley on Mar 10, 2009 3:35:52 GMT -6
I love you more than words could say No matter what I'm here to stay I give to you my beating heart Because I know we'll never part.
You are the one who keeps me strong When you're around nothing goes wrong I'll take your hand and go where you go With us together our love will grow.
I only have one heart So please don't crush it or rip it apart Hold me tight when I start to cry Hold on and I'll tell you why.
When I cry it's because you're here Because with you I have no fear You give me strength to go through the day Then my tears begin to go away.
I know that you will never leave me That's why I know we're meant to be I will tell you everyday How much I love you in every way.
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 2, 2009 13:26:09 GMT -6
Hmm...I don't really like the rhyme in this. The AB pattern seems a little forced and throws off the rhythm of the piece. It has potential though. I like this:
"When I cry its because you're here"
....there is something hopeless and yet romantic in those words.
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