Getting Rid of Red

[Laura]

I see more red every time my eyelids lift
it gets darker with age like I do

it's like emptying pockets full of change
a tear in the side, lint collecting
like my blood wall it was shredded

and out it came, out from my body
a flower rejecting its own pollen
petals bloomed now drenched in shivers

just empty out your pockets
like I did my baby

Friday afternoon never felt so gloomy
one grey cloud and my stomach's rainy
thunderstorms of unheard cries

no mouth to make the sound
no eyes to form the puddles of tears
I only wished would gather at my feet

I miss my belly button getting bigger
and the swelling of my interior

if this fetus wasn't a cancer
I would have held it into evolution

and there is no more yellow, just red
forming scripts of unwritten bible words
drowning my sins as they wash away

the blood it ran from between my legs
and out it came, not ready for a world like this

I said empty out your pockets,
just like I emptied my baby.

[Absinthe]

"and out it came, out from my body
a flower rejecting its own pollen
petals bloomed now drenched in shivers

just empty out your pockets
like I did my baby"

......Wow.....definitely hard hitting. This was great.

[thecrazybeautiful]

Eerie. Strong. Emotional. Wowie.

I don't even know what to say.

[tearsofhatred0715]

i didnt even get past the first stanza and i got bored, tiring and strange

[Laura]

Can I ask you how you felt strange?

[tearsofhatred0715]

i felt strange reading and responding to a poem as insignificant and horrid as yours, waste of my time

[Laura]

That sounds more like a comment directed towards me as a writer, not on my poem. Although abortion isn't for everyone . . . I still think you should give more as to what you didn't like. Just telling someone it's not good doesn't help them to improve. I appreciate negative feedback, if feedback is what I receive.