race i rarely won

[grifter]

I was young and running with the colts
teasing the fences as time crept
like crows at the corner of the garden,
focused and forward,
even though the scarecrow’s radio
blared the talking heads in the tomatoes.

The hound dogs yelped as they yawned
stretching their hind legs,
and the sprinklers shined
with the smell of green
as the colts and I
came free of the clouds,
chasing trees to the creek.

We rested in the rustle of squirrels
drinking as fast as fun
then splashing and dancing
daring each other to run,
till we took off as one
shaking our heads at the sun.

[Laura]

"The hound dogs yelped as they yawned
stretching their hind legs,
and the sprinklers shined
with the smell of green
as the colts and I
came free of the clouds,
chasing trees to the creek"

--I can picture this. Reminds me of track and field back in school. I hated that.

"daring each other to run"

--this feels like it would be the sort of fun that goes on between two athelete friends.

[thecrazybeautiful]

"even though the scarecrow’s radio
blared the talking heads in the tomatoes"

There's something about those lines that makes it seem like the idea could fit into a sci-fi movie. Like one with living scarecrows and killer tomatoes. It would be kinda interesting, in that goofy sci-fi movie way

"drinking as fast as fun"

That has to be my favorite line. "Fast as fun" seems like a phrase that could pop up with people saying that when they're having a good time. Heh, it makes me kinda laugh.

[Only Me]

I didn't really like th rhyming. But that is me. I could picture the colts running around. nice job on the imagery. It reminds me of the disney movie "spirit" If you haven't seen it I suggest everyone see it. You are never too old for Disney movies. lol. Its a good movie and has a good message. even if it is animated.