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May 25, 2006 2:50:36 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on May 25, 2006 2:50:36 GMT -6
Colors
Liquid light pours down, Through pearl colored clouds. Baby blue skies, Are bright with joy. Grass the shade of emeralds, Swishes lightly in a crystal breeze, As a sapphire stream, Babbles and chuckles happily, Hugging the banks of velvet sand. The day dawned bright, Like the moist paints of an artists palette, And it fades into lavender and smoke, Then to ebony as tiny jewels, Like diamonds in front of a candle, Appear in the sky. Night wraps the world gently, Like a baby in a blanket, Sleep comes to one side of the world, As the other wakes, While one dreams of treasure, Of gold hoarding dragons, And over brave knights, The other plays with rainbows, And sunshine showers, Dodging raindrops to chase the prism of colors, Across yet another cerulean sky, Dotted with cottony clouds of orange.
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stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
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May 25, 2006 18:30:57 GMT -6
Post by stupidxgirl on May 25, 2006 18:30:57 GMT -6
I really like this actually, it had some steller images You're a wonderful writer doll, keep it up. "And over brave knights, The other plays with rainbows, And sunshine showers," That part stuck out to me a lot
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May 26, 2006 0:00:19 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on May 26, 2006 0:00:19 GMT -6
Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
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May 29, 2006 18:57:40 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 29, 2006 18:57:40 GMT -6
"Then to ebony as tiny jewels, Like diamonds in front of a candle, Appear in the sky."
Not bad there.
This is pretty good. You did well with describing the different colors.
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May 30, 2006 1:48:38 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on May 30, 2006 1:48:38 GMT -6
Glad you liked it!
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Jun 9, 2006 12:02:45 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Jun 9, 2006 12:02:45 GMT -6
"Grass the shade of emeralds, Swishes lightly in a crystal breeze, As a sapphire stream, Babbles and chuckles happily,"
--this part is what stood out for me. The rhyme to stream and happily fit well. I love sapphire and emerald too.
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Jul 11, 2006 0:17:05 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Jul 11, 2006 0:17:05 GMT -6
"Sleep comes to one side of the world, As the other wakes," I love the concept of this. It almost gives the world a innocent feel to it... you know what I am saying? I am not sure how I missed this one, but I'm glad I finally read it.
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