Crash (Which way is Up)

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300]When the world is closing in,
it’s nearly impossible to determine which way is up.

The sky blackens and
hearts dangle freely from barbed wire hangers,
souls drip,

drip,

dripping to the floor
in dark crimson puddles of exasperation.
Eyes turn skyward
begging whatever divine being there is
to stop the madness.
Tears flow freely through clouds of ice and snow,
getting caught among the spider web lies
and cotton candy conundrums.
Where is there to go but down,
down into the deep eternal slumber of nothingness?
The coffin is lonely, but liberating;
wooden walls containing unshared thoughts
and bottled up intentions with deep-seeded regret.
Cookie cutter beings melt away
into smog filled memories of yesteryear,
frosting coated breakdowns hot on their trail.
Shattered pieces of menagerie
slice open salted wounds.
Attempts on the core being are left unnoticed
as the whole must accommodate
for added distractions of
daisy bloomers and rosebud changes.
When the world is closing in,

crashing down,

spinning right side up,

upside down,

every which way,

it’s nearly impossible to determine which way is up. [/glow]

[Laura]

"The sky blackens and
hearts dangle freely from barbed wire hangers,
souls drip,

drip,

dripping to the floor"

--this draws you in and makes you want to read the rest.

"Where is there to go but down,
down into the deep eternal slumber of nothingness?
The coffin is lonely, but liberating;
wooden walls containing unshared thoughts
and bottled up intentions with deep-seeded regret."

--I love this whole part so much. I can't describe how it made me feel. Kind of sad but not ... weird. Great job, one of my favourites and a great idea about what's up.

[Absinthe]

[glow=black,2,300] Thank you. I'm really glad you liked it. [/glow]

[Only Me]

I could swear I responded to this one... I know that I read it. I like it. it is wonderful it truly is...
I love the lines--
"Cookie cutter beings melt away
into smog filled memories of yesteryear,
frosting coated breakdowns hot on their trail. "

one can read so much into those lines... I love it.

[QueenPaige4]

this whole poem was wonderful..good imagery through out and it flowed so nicely
it was really good and i loved it

[thecrazybeautiful]

"hearts dangle freely from barbed wire hangers, "

That is... wow.

"as the whole must accommodate
for added distractions of
daisy bloomers and rosebud changes. "

My favorite part. I can't even explain it.