If it wasnt for the rain!

[The Sightless Dreamer]

The thunder roars as gods tears fall
all of the world is washed away
All of my thought becomeone iwht the sky
my mind becomes entangled with every strike of lightning

Everything rattles as the thunder hit
everthing goes silent as the rain drips
My consiousness slopwly slips
I'm falling asleep to the precious sound

I wake up in the morning
I walk outside, I feel the dew in my toes
I look around and am blinded by sun
The greenery feels soft to the touch

The flowers bloom with Gods love
So i guess over night i grew up
And all i needed was some rain...

[Absinthe]

That was interesting. There were a few typos, easily fixable, but other than that...nice job.

[Samccaleb]

This is good. I agree with Absinthe, there are a few errors, like thought would be thoughts and become one should be seperated and iwth should be with. Those were the only ones that I saw. Other than that this is a good poem, keep writing, you can only get better.

[Only Me]

"thought becomeone iwht" typos... but other than that awesome job!