suicidetank
Contently A Distraction
very well then
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Post by suicidetank on May 15, 2005 20:32:48 GMT -6
The Heartless
how simple this day can be well at least from what i can see rising out of bed clearing my throat scrathing my head well time to take my place in the day could i possibly feel any more tired do some coke and get wired spending time idly at work afternoon comes around while driving through town I get scolded dont really care maybe i'll get a wench on my way home god i could really go for some poison rips through an already damaged valley drowning out all thought take my place on a couch pluck some strings but nothing comes out ive screamed away my mental health all this week has been hell i guess one more wont hurt or so i said and now i sit here watching him speak but hearing feeling nothing concerns falling onto the dead and heartless
this was written because i feel this is how this person lives his day im the one who is talking to him
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Post by Sharon on May 20, 2005 1:16:05 GMT -6
[glow=Purple,2,300]sounds like this man needs a vacation seriously though, life is too short to live it miserably. this is an interesting piece, thank you for sharing Vinny ;D[/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on May 23, 2005 21:36:08 GMT -6
revise it other than that, great
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Post by Samccaleb on Oct 7, 2005 21:11:27 GMT -6
^ I dont understand revising it. I think its good as it is. There is thought and emotion in it. I think is really well written. Keep writing. Good job.
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Post by Only Me on Oct 9, 2005 1:13:38 GMT -6
scrathing.. scratching, idly... idley, ive... I've dont... don't, wont... won't simple revisions... but yes they are needed...
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