Insomnia (3:14 AM)

[Absinthe]

This poem was written at 3:14 AM (at least that's what I wrote at the top of it.


My eyelids are heavy
though they refuse to close.
A yawn wracks my body
as my breathing slows.

As I lie in bed,
willing it to come,
sweet sleep will not take me
before the rising of the sun.

[another yawn. . .another sigh]

My eyelids droop again,
only to open up wide.
All I want is for sleep to take me,
fo in its depths I'll hide.

I'm wide awake again,
though tired as can be,
for insufferable insomnia
has taken over me.

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]i know i go through this sometimes, but for you, i'm thinking it's almost like a ritual. your writing seems very organized, i know i couldn't do the same at 3 in the morn. [/glow]

[QueenPaige4]

that was really good

[Absinthe]

Thanks, guys. . .er. . .girls.

[puchik0]

wow i can totally relate to that..
the sand man is evil and does not come to me often

[Absinthe]

Ahhh, yes....the sand mand is not very kind, is he? He's a rather nasty ol' bugger in my opinion. lol. Thanks for the comment.

[Samccaleb]

I saw one little typo, but other than that, its really good. I know how insomnia is....it sucks. I hate it when I cant go to sleep, I usually end up reading or scribbling down little random thoughts in a journal....its kinda funny actually some of the things I write because Im so tired, I dont realize what Im writing. Anyway...this is good.

[Only Me]

something i know all too well... in fact it is 1:19 am here and im prolly not going to bed for a couple more hours...

[Laura]

A definite favourite by you for me ... I liked the rhyme scheme and it had some very enjoyable lines. Particularly:

"As I lie in bed,
willing it to come,
sweet sleep will not take me
before the rising of the sun."