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Post by Absinthe on Jul 19, 2005 18:24:57 GMT -6
*This is an ode to all of those girls, or even guys, out there that are "perfect". After all, perfect isn't all it's cracked up to be. . .*
She sits there, superior to all the perfect hair, the perfect body
[she's gorgeus]
She's the girl everyone wants to be perfect boyfriend, perfect trust fund
[oh so popular]
She's got a life in a dream world lots of friends, teachers pet class president
Little Miss Perfect has no faults yet she's alone in a crowded room
[no one truly knows her]
Her soul, yearning to be free, aches within
[it's afraid to shine]
Eyes are the window they must be open A smile is the front door If only she meant it
[her soul remains hidden]
Her life is amazing the perfect sorrow, the perfect hell
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tommy
Wishes To Be A Distraction
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Post by tommy on Jul 20, 2005 6:37:39 GMT -6
thats really insightful. great way to take a crack at stereotypes and stuff. very thought provoking. nice job
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Post by Sharon on Jul 20, 2005 11:29:37 GMT -6
thats really insightful. great way to take a crack at stereotypes and stuff. very thought provoking. nice job [glow=purple,2,300]exactly. of course, this is not a case for every one but i'm sure there are those out there who can relate to this piece.[/glow]
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Post by fightingirishman on Jul 20, 2005 20:37:27 GMT -6
I liked this one! It really reminds me of one that my friend wrote, pretty much on the same topic. It's something I really forget, along the lines of "If I were this or that... then my life would be absolutely awesome". But everyone has their hardships, no matter what traits they have. Awesome job . "Her life is amazing the perfect sorrow, the perfect hell" I really liked the paradox at the end .
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Post by Angelamongsociety on Jul 22, 2005 18:01:00 GMT -6
Great poem. Just goes to show perfection isn't perfect.
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Post by Absinthe on Jul 22, 2005 19:47:00 GMT -6
Thank you guys. I really appreciate all the great feedback. Also, I'm glad you all picked up on my meaning, and you accepted it. Thanks again for the feedback.
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Post by haley13xoxo on Jul 25, 2005 17:13:36 GMT -6
i like it i worote a poem similar to this one b4 maybe i'll post it
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Post by allmeheart on Jul 28, 2005 19:15:02 GMT -6
the ups and downs of stereotypes, esp. the perfectly popular, i like your style of writing, job well done
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 1, 2005 11:40:19 GMT -6
Thank you guys for the comments. I'm glad you liked it
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Post by Samccaleb on Oct 7, 2005 21:18:55 GMT -6
This is good. I wonder how many truly popular people feel that way? Anyway, good job.
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Post by Only Me on Oct 9, 2005 1:21:54 GMT -6
"Her soul, yearning to be free, aches within" yup! "yet she's alone in a crowded room "" so true!
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Post by Laura on Jan 31, 2006 16:07:37 GMT -6
"perfect trust fund"
--interesting, good way of putting it.
It wasn't my favourite by you but the general idea is annoying, isn't it? I hate people who think they're perfect. Ugh.
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