I finally wrote something else

[karl]

I wrote this last night after looking at lots of lyrics by Athlete and Interpol.

Sit
Imperfect posture
Is not deep
Unless I'm in this mood
Tonight
Bed awaits, but
Often procrastination erases
Its call for me
Brush teeth, wash face (certain way), remove contact lenses from eyes:
A filmy layer of
Vision
"I wonder
What it's like to see clearly
Before one's eyes close for the night"
But keeping contacts in
Is taboo and
I obey the rules these days
Don't I?

[Absinthe]

that was good......I liked it

[QueenPaige4]

Bravo...it was great

[allmeheart]

you have a diff. style of writing, very original

[Xanthic Flower]

[glow=red,2,300]The whole thing is good but I especially love the first few lines.[/glow]

[Laura]

"Sit
Imperfect posture
Is not deep
Unless I'm in this mood
Tonight
Bed awaits, but
Often procrastination erases
Its call for me"

and

"A filmy layer of
Vision
"I wonder
What it's like to see clearly"

--are my favourite parts. I like the words/phrase "erases", "filmy", and "imperfect posture".

[Samccaleb]

good descriptive words. I think that this is good. I know the feeling of not being able to se without the contacts....it sucks.....anyway, this is good keep it up.

[Only Me]

lol... great work... it seems to jump from one subject to another but doesnt really switch topics... if that makes sense... anyway, great work!