stupidxgirl
A Devoted Distraction
So You Sailed Away...
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Post by stupidxgirl on Mar 31, 2006 20:38:33 GMT -6
a/n: This isn't my best...But it's written for my little neice Gracie. She's very sick and in the hospital. She's the light of all of our worlds, that's really why I wrote this.
Breathe for me, dear god just breathe and keep singing and smiling and dancing on your tiptoes in your pink swirly summer dress. With sandals to match resting between your thumbs and index fingers.
Because I need your laughter flooding my ears and washing over me Because this is the moment I need to always remember the most.
I need you to keep moving me and shaking up my world with your innocence and butterfly wings pointing upright to kiss the sky that swirls around our heads.
And "you are my sunshine my only sunshine," with little hands and an enormous heart and swirlingmixingswimming beautiful happiness. And you just make me want to live in your world again.
So keep breating and movingshakingdancing your way through my life because you are my sunshine and you are my grace.
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Post by Laura on Mar 31, 2006 21:07:10 GMT -6
That's really sweet I really adored this line: " Because I need your laughter" --just saying you need it makes it more because it's about a child. I really loved this whole thing, it flowed so nicely together and it's just so full of love. And real love, love that you can never change. Family. I'm rambling, aren't I? I just overall really enjoyed it
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Post by thecrazybeautiful on Apr 3, 2006 15:40:21 GMT -6
Aw, this is sweet.
I think the use of the words "swirl" "swirling" and "swirly" makes it seem more like it's for a child than any other word that could have been used there. It really puts feeling into it.
Very nice.
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