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Post by Only Me on Aug 31, 2005 14:19:36 GMT -6
[glow=red,2,300]So, I wrote this about my dad and the fact that I have not forgotten him or his memory but that I can function now and basiclaly telling him that i know that things will be ok now... its still a wip... please give me feedback... [/glow][glow=black,2,300]Every year, without fail The leaves on the trees turn colors Slowly they all fall to the ground
Every year, without fail My life turns upside down Slowly I find myself falling back into this trap
Every year since you went away I have dreaded the leaves falling I have hated the beautiful colors
Every year unintentionally I find myself trying to find a way to forget you Never was there a way to sedate my tears
Every year when the cold weather begins I imagine what life would have been like I try to remember what life was like
This year, things are changing I have not forgotten you Or pushed you out of my life
This year, I realized that I am an adult now I no longer need to cling to the idea that you will live again I no longer cry myself to sleep over thoughts of you
This year I am a new me Yesterday I noticed the beautiful colors of fall Today I felt a chill in the weather I was able to enjoy this season for the first time [/glow]
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Post by Sharon on Aug 31, 2005 15:34:44 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]what i loved about this piece was the fact that it has a resolution in the end you know like, acceptance. pure emotions have been portrayed here, good job with that. [/glow]
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Post by Only Me on Sept 1, 2005 18:20:06 GMT -6
Thank you for your words Sharon
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Post by Samccaleb on Sept 10, 2005 22:34:25 GMT -6
Great poem L, as always. I like the emotion because it makes the reader feel like they're experiencing it with you.
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Post by Only Me on Sept 10, 2005 22:39:45 GMT -6
ok nessy... i think you have replied to all mine now... you can reply to other people as well you know... I know you espcially love me and my work.. but really... kidding... thanks for the feedback...
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Post by Samccaleb on Oct 7, 2005 21:26:52 GMT -6
You know I'm always here to read or listen to anything.
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Post by Only Me on Oct 8, 2005 12:15:42 GMT -6
yea *blushes and rubs the tip of her toe in the ground with hands behind back shrugging* (embarrassed look) gosh... thanks S.
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