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Envy
Sept 10, 2005 23:01:35 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on Sept 10, 2005 23:01:35 GMT -6
The streets are silent, Darkness reigns sovereign. The only light comes from within Souls that travel freely in this place. It is an evil light, Glowing the color blood-red. Ancient beasts haunt this land, Their satanic footsteps, Sound like thunder on the horizon, But never leave a trace. Other evils dwell here as well, Ones almost human in nature. They swoop in and out of the shadows, Searching for their prey. But these unnatural enemies, Give themselves away. Their eyes glint green in the pitch like shades of night. They envy us. Much like the clawed terrors that roam. They dont carry the true light, The elven light that glows in our hearts, Our bodies, and our minds.
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Envy
Sept 11, 2005 12:30:05 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Sept 11, 2005 12:30:05 GMT -6
"footstpes" i think is supposed to be footsteps... if you click the modify button you can fix it
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Envy
Sept 11, 2005 22:46:02 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on Sept 11, 2005 22:46:02 GMT -6
You're right, thank you, its fixed
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Envy
Sept 23, 2005 16:30:27 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on Sept 23, 2005 16:30:27 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]very nice, this was very fantasy like indeed ;D[/glow]
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Envy
Sept 26, 2005 15:43:51 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on Sept 26, 2005 15:43:51 GMT -6
I like to try and write different things each time but I dont always succeed so when theis one came out the way it did, I was really surprised. Thank you.
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Envy
Nov 22, 2005 17:46:14 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Nov 22, 2005 17:46:14 GMT -6
i liked it, gets your imagination to power up
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Envy
Nov 28, 2005 16:37:45 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Nov 28, 2005 16:37:45 GMT -6
"Glowing the color blood-red. Ancient beasts haunt this land, Their satanic footsteps, Sound like thunder on the horizon"
--my favourite part. I like the ideas. I don't think the ending was as good as the beginning but that's ok.
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