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Post by psiloveyou on Aug 29, 2005 16:45:04 GMT -6
This is my first post of my own material. Please let me know what you think.
Sleepless Night
Twisted images shining through so bright, illuminating light messy yet so synchronized just like a kaleidoscope fill my senses, fill them all even if words are illegible even if sounds incomprehensible tell me all let me know wake me up into a dream let me fly into the sleepless night.
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 29, 2005 16:58:04 GMT -6
[glow=black,2,300] I am so happy to see you posting your own work! ;D
I really liked this. Its short but your message definitely gets across.
"fill my senses, fill them all even if words are illegible"
I liked that part best. Nice job on this...can't wait to see more from you.[/glow]
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Post by Sharon on Sept 1, 2005 20:55:39 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]oh cool you've finally decided to post some of your material ;D [/glow] [glow=purple,2,300]that first line sounds almost like an oxymoron to me, but i have no idea why exactly. i'm glad to see you posting, i look foward to seeing more [/glow]
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Post by psiloveyou on Sept 2, 2005 15:23:41 GMT -6
Thank you Absinthe and Sharon, your comments mean a lot to me. Maybe I'll post more later.
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Post by Only Me on Oct 2, 2005 0:40:19 GMT -6
great job... I think you should definetely post more of your work!
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Post by allmeheart on Nov 22, 2005 17:44:52 GMT -6
was okay, not really my style but for those who do like that type of poetry im sure that they would enjoy it
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Post by Laura on Nov 28, 2005 16:39:42 GMT -6
"wake me up into a dream"
--brilliant line. The whole idea of awakening into a dream is incredible. I also really liked:
"so bright, illuminating light messy yet so synchronized"
--really good job on this one.
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