complex minds

[tommy]

Feeling lost in an empty mind
Puzzled by the simple complexity of life
Trying to find an existence
Wondering if life is here to be lived
Or are we here to live life dying

The mind that constantly asks questions
Of a world not ready to answer
No response from anyone
Keeps shouting but feels alone
Alone in the cold of night
Alone with the silence of shouted suggestions

By him self but by no means alone
The voice of so-called reason
Preaching the verbal blasphemy of hate
Telling me I'm wrong and should look around
Trying to find good in a place so empty of societies good reason

If life is to be lived alone
Cold and shallow with no companion other than your mind
The self-asked questions asked by you
Will find no answer other than disappointed silence
As learning alone to learn from your self
Is by no means an easy task
Considered as an eternal damnation

[Sharon]

[glow=purple,2,300]wow, very interesting, i liked that one

favorite part:

The mind that constantly asks questions
Of a world not ready to answer
No response from anyone
Keeps shouting but feels alone
Alone in the cold of night
Alone with the silence of shouted suggestions

there is something about the repetition of the word "alone" that i really liked.

my only suggestion for you... is to not always have a capital letter in each line. for me, whenever i see a capital letter of a new line i always assume that it's a new idea, not a continuation of the previous line.

thank you for sharing this with us [/glow]

[Absinthe]

I thought that was a very good piece. The emotion in it was well-felt. I do agree with ^Sharon about the capital letters at the beginning of each line though, but otherwise...it was excellent

[allmeheart]

i have taken the very same advice Sharon just gave about caps, but for some reason, i have a bad habit of forgetting to use the advice even though i agree w/ the suggestion, i liked the poem, interesting topic, seems as though its a situation i find myself often in...

[Only Me]

"Puzzled by the simple complexity of life" I LOVE this line. It seems so true to the point.