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Life
May 31, 2005 19:22:37 GMT -6
Post by burningsun on May 31, 2005 19:22:37 GMT -6
This message might be a bit weird, but this is ny first time writing poetry. It is also very short.
Life
Life is a point where there is no turning back. You cannot erase the history out of your life. Life will not wash away like earth against the sea. Life is but a journey that we all must follow.
Life fills your soul with much feeling. It can send your life in an upheaval and fill it with bliss. Life stands still for no one. We must all face life in one time or the next. Many will begin a small journey upon the Earth. Here is where they begin a new chapter for their story of life.
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Life
May 31, 2005 20:44:02 GMT -6
Post by Sharon on May 31, 2005 20:44:02 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i felt like you repeated "life" too much, first time writing poetry eh? not bad [/glow]
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Life
Jun 1, 2005 6:37:14 GMT -6
Post by QueenPaige4 on Jun 1, 2005 6:37:14 GMT -6
Hm... First time writing poetry. Not bad for a first timer. It's good. I have to agree with Sharon though I do think you repeated life to much but it made the poem seem more you. You should revise it. Well good job
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Life
Jun 2, 2005 8:49:55 GMT -6
Post by allmeheart on Jun 2, 2005 8:49:55 GMT -6
i agree, it wasnt bad but life umm u should use diff. wording
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Life
Sept 18, 2005 23:27:37 GMT -6
Post by Only Me on Sept 18, 2005 23:27:37 GMT -6
"Life fills your soul with much feeling. It can send your life in an upheaval and fill it with bliss." an example of using life in the wrong context... life can't really send life into upheaval.... but great job for it being your first time...
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