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Post by sharonslover on May 19, 2005 14:53:20 GMT -6
this is a poem i made up out of the blue for eng class
i got an A for it but id like some peer critisim
the hands of a clock always strike a blow to me but i shall take it back as if it was owed to me
even if i must go against the trinity i will see the end of infinity
now matter how long it takes no matter the risk or stakes
i wont let anybody think for so im a rebel if so i demand im put on my own level
cause my state of mind is no where near generic and if that makes me a heretic
everyone will turn a cheek to me for walking to the beat of my own drum
some say it is impossible is see it as a mere obstacle
everyones like everyone white and black is the dullest i on the other hand continue to live my life to the fullest
would you know the last thing i say before the last time i breathe
carpe diem the day ive seized
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Post by Sharon on May 20, 2005 1:25:37 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]hey robert, i see that you still haven't changed your username, grr lol ;D i've already told you that i really like this poem, but i guess i'll say it again. i really like this poem it flows really well, i bet other people in your class' poems didn't even compare to this one. did people even do the assignment? thanks for sharing![/glow]
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Post by allmeheart on May 23, 2005 21:36:58 GMT -6
good job, i liked it to be honest
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Post by burningsun on Aug 22, 2005 19:37:58 GMT -6
[glow=blue,2,300]nice use of words. very good.[/glow]
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Post by sharonslover on May 5, 2006 10:50:28 GMT -6
thank you
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Post by Only Me on May 9, 2006 14:45:33 GMT -6
"everyone will turn a cheek to me for walking to the beat of my own drum" those lines really stuck out to me... I totally get it nice work! thats good that you got an A!
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