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Post by tragicxwhore on May 15, 2007 18:28:25 GMT -6
The rhyme does seem somewhat forced, I know. I began this as a freewrite, and it turned into rhyme. I decided to keep it that way. Summer Scene and winter dream are often repeated- but this is due to the "American Dream" idea I had in my mind. <3
The trees are green A summer scene That slowly fades away Birds are flying; Flowers dying Nothing left to say The leaves are brown A silent sound Haunts my every thought A hopeless girl Leaves the world With a single shot The snow falls down A saddened town Sends chills upon my spine The birds return And we soon learn, Nothing will be "fine" Bliss for now, And lots of sound, All of this so fake. Wrists are bleeding I am needing Something else to make. Truth be told Of Heaven's gold, I long to live this dream. The bugs come out The flowers sprout A lovely summer scene Repeating notions Silenced oceans Nature's truthful sea Your summer scene; And winter dream All we'll ever need. The world's hate gone Waited long For nature just to be And in the end A surreal rend To bring us to our fall Nature's cure Precious; pure Finally ends all.
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Post by NotSoPerfect on May 15, 2007 19:36:43 GMT -6
I liked it. The rhyme didn't seem too forced to me at all.
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