ibjumblin
Wishes To Be A Distraction
I don't want to wake up, the fantasy world means so much more to me than real life ever could.
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Frozen
Jan 28, 2007 13:09:22 GMT -6
Post by ibjumblin on Jan 28, 2007 13:09:22 GMT -6
Fire burning in the trees Destined to fall, to die Everything will freeze Everything will freeze Healing rain never falls The tree withers alone soon the yearning fire calls trapped by an ancient wall reaching forth, never feeling the green hills stretching branches jump and hit the ceiling everything falls, the tree is reeling trying to survive without a soul the coals are growing cool life has paid its toll the blazing tree is now a pole unforgiving, lifeless metal never able to forget memory will have to settle everything has turned to metal scorch marks rain upon the crowd a final fury before the end what will cover but a shroud and not even God can be proud Everything will freeze Everything will freeze
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Frozen
Mar 17, 2007 13:26:05 GMT -6
Post by Absinthe on Mar 17, 2007 13:26:05 GMT -6
"Fire burning in the trees Destined to fall, to die Everything will freeze Everything will freeze"
.....I like the first stanza and the repetition of "Everything will freeze" at the end, but the stuff in the middle was just kind of eh......it didn't really have much to it, I thought. It was just kind of filler. You had some good phrases, but it just didn't all come together for me.
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