Comparing Me

[chaosns]

Ok, I wrote this'un a few weeks ago, its...ok but yeah, I'm gonna post it anyway.

Comparing Me


Where can I go
When the world has taken its toll on me
Who can I tell
When I'm just not the same person I used to be
Everything is so confusing here
I just don't know what to do
I can't make sense of my feelings
It's like they're not mine
I'm no myself
I don't know what happened
The people around me don't help
Is it me or the world around me that has changed
When did it all happen
I don't know where to go
Who to turn to
Everything reminds me of nothing
The people I know, don't know me
The things I do
Just aren't the same
My eyes, my face, my voice
When did they all change
A new person emerged
One I don't like
Hang on to yesterday when you don't even remember it
Worrying about everything
This can't be healthy
But who can I tell
When my whole life is hell

[Laura]

It's okay, it has potential. I found it kind of repetitive but this:

"My eyes, my face, my voice
When did they all change"

--I liked this question/part. I know it's hard to put feelings of the dreaded "who I am" into words ... it's difficult to make it seem real, too. I guess when you think about it, everything is difficult to put into words, especially original or creatively. Glad to see a newbie posting though

[stupidxgirl]

I agree with Laura, but these lines are the ones that stuck out to me the most:
"I can't make sense of my feelings
It's like they're not mine"

I can relate to that feeling, it can be so madning how uncertain your feelings really are sometimes. It has potential, keep it up

[chaosns]

sweetpearl said:

It's okay, it has potential. I found it kind of repetitive but this:

"My eyes, my face, my voice
When did they all change"

--I liked this question/part. I know it's hard to put feelings of the dreaded "who I am" into words ... it's difficult to make it seem real, too. I guess when you think about it, everything is difficult to put into words, especially original or creatively. Glad to see a newbie posting though

Yeah I can see where you would call it repititive, its just, re-emphasizing a point, I guess. This one, is my favorite and may just be my best, you can't really compare poetry IMO, there's just too many variables.