jtalago
Contently A Distraction
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Post by jtalago on Dec 5, 2005 0:30:53 GMT -6
Clear or unclear? ----------------------
Sweaty hands On a lonely man Grip the glass tight
Looking for cold Calm, and old Feelings left alone
Inside the glass Swimming alone His downtrodden home
Stepping inside Retreating again He lays upon the bed
One more night Turning from fear He looks up to see he’s here
Again here will leave And tomorrow to see He’s right back there again
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Post by Only Me on Dec 5, 2005 0:48:27 GMT -6
a little unclear... ? can you change the font color by chance? I am not sure what is really going on... in the end... ok never mind, I just re-read it... it makes more sense... "Again here will leave And tomorrow to see He’s right back there again" are the lines that threw me off... it was clear up until that point... ?
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Post by Laura on Dec 5, 2005 15:46:14 GMT -6
I don't really know what it's about but that's just me and I'm usually slow.
"Looking for cold Calm, and old Feelings left alone"
--I liked this stanza though. Yes, the font colour makes it hard to read and hard on my eyes.
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