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Save Me
May 25, 2006 2:43:44 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on May 25, 2006 2:43:44 GMT -6
Save Me
A stare that touches me, Burns my skin, And weighs me down, Something I can feel, Yet intangible. I don’t know where its coming from, A whisper over my shoulder, A faint brush on my arm, I cant seem to find the source, Buts its got me going crazy, I’m being pushed to the edge. Maybe I’m paranoid, But I just cant take it anymore, I’m climbing the walls, My fear is killing me, Somebody save me, Save me from myself
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Save Me
May 29, 2006 18:02:15 GMT -6
Post by thecrazybeautiful on May 29, 2006 18:02:15 GMT -6
"A stare that touches me, Burns my skin, And weighs me down,"
I like those lines.
"Something I can feel, Yet intangible."
Love the word intangible.
"Somebody save my, Save me from myself"
I'm guessing that would be 'save me' instead of 'save my.' This idea is really common and it would be better if you'd go into more detail instead of just saying it straight out.
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Save Me
May 30, 2006 1:41:38 GMT -6
Post by Samccaleb on May 30, 2006 1:41:38 GMT -6
Its very difficult for me to go into more detail. I am a very straight forward person. I dont express myself well in terms of lots of details. Somes times I can but most times I just cant get it to work.
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Save Me
Jun 9, 2006 11:33:28 GMT -6
Post by Laura on Jun 9, 2006 11:33:28 GMT -6
"Somebody save me, Save me from myself"
--ah this reminds me of a song but I can't think of which one. ARGH.
"I’m climbing the walls"
--I like this sentence. It gives such a fantastic image. I'm not too sure about the rest ... I didn't really feel anything while reading it.
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