jtalago
Contently A Distraction
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Post by jtalago on Nov 27, 2005 17:50:07 GMT -6
Any comments (good, bad, first that come to mind)? They'd be greatly appreciated.
Leaves touch the ground Once fallen Making no sound Only sense
To me, and only In my heart and through my bones I’m loudly touching nothing And falling alone
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Post by Laura on Nov 27, 2005 19:17:57 GMT -6
I really liked this. It was short but effective. I like the message and ideas. I liked the rhyme scheme here too.
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Post by jigglytuffy on Nov 27, 2005 22:18:01 GMT -6
It was short, but I think I got the message/theme. Deep. Good stuff.
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jtalago
Contently A Distraction
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Post by jtalago on Nov 28, 2005 11:24:07 GMT -6
Thanks.
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Post by Only Me on Nov 28, 2005 15:14:19 GMT -6
oh wow... short sweet and to the point my favorite type of poetry... getting the feelings out in so little words is a feat not many have conquered!
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Post by jigglytuffy on Nov 28, 2005 15:33:00 GMT -6
Yeah, I know what you mean.
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