jtalago
Contently A Distraction
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Post by jtalago on Nov 13, 2005 23:04:30 GMT -6
Trying out break from the confines of rhyming.....let me know what u think:
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When I leave
That final time
Why do you cry
I am finally
Who I want to be
I am your thoughts
Your stories
Your dreams
I am your memory of me
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Post by Laura on Nov 17, 2005 17:25:43 GMT -6
It was quite short but interesting. The final line:
"I am your memory of me"
--it makes so much sense but I've never heard anyone say it before.
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jtalago
Contently A Distraction
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Post by jtalago on Nov 19, 2005 15:26:34 GMT -6
Thanks.
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Post by Only Me on Nov 28, 2005 15:40:48 GMT -6
once again short sweet and to the point... I really like your work!... these lines "Why do you cry I am finally Who I want to be" really struck me... cause I guess all people when they reach that certain point in their lives where they are who they really want to be aren't always accepted by everyone around them. My fmaily is contantly ragging on me for what I have become, but quite frankly I am the person that I want to be...  thanks for posting this... it is awesome! |
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thanks for posting this... it is awesome!
