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Post by The Sightless Dreamer on Sept 7, 2005 17:37:15 GMT -6
I feel like I have never felt before Someone that loves me the same. It makes me feel so happy Then why am I so sad?
He makes me smile The why do i feel the tears? He is everything Ive always wanted Then why do i still have desire?
If he is everything They why do I feel like nothing? What have i done to cause My self this pain....
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Post by Only Me on Sept 7, 2005 20:59:57 GMT -6
ok... just a few typos.. but other than that i like it... I am going to say this... even though I know I make the mistake a lot... apostrphes are needed... in a few places in the last two poems i read of yours. keep up the good work... I know I am being particular tonight... but "it builds character" (as my gramma says quite frequently)
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Post by Sharon on Sept 23, 2005 15:45:34 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]i definitely advise you to fix the typos, yes, the reader knows what you mean but it ruins the message you are trying to present for they can easily be distracted[/glow]
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