This Spells Evil

[anonx]

[glow=red,2,300]How do I feel? You want to know?
I feel like a black hole
I feel like if I tell you things
I’ll have to sell my soul
That’s right I said it loud and clear
But I’ll repeat it for you to hear
The devils runs the world down there
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[glow=blue,2,300]What do I see? You want to know?
I see no silver lined cloud
I see a world of fire and flames
No one down there is proud
No one can make you laugh or grin
That’s right you're punished for your sin
Don’t you see? You cannot win?
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[glow=red,2,300]What do I know? You want me to say?
I know that your body is dead
I know it is laying somewhere up there
The spot it was shot the place it bled
No wings for you, you cannot fly
All you did was lie and lie
I know that you deserved to die
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[glow=blue,2,300]Who am I? You want to know?
I make your life a living hell
I punish those who do bad things
I was there when evil fell
No angel bands or golden hands
No songs so sweet and angel feet
Nothing for you, you cannot have
All the things that heaven has
For now you’re made to pay the price
Because you were naughty…<br>[/glow][glow=red,2,300]instead of nice[/glow]

[NotSoPerfect]

the colors really emphasized your theme.

[Sharon]

nicely done anonX. just a pointer... on the 2nd from the last line of the 2nd stanza, you should change "your" to "you're" or "you are". I really liked how you ended this place with

"For now you’re stuck to pay the price
Because you were naughty…<br>instead of nice"

i think that using the word "stuck" makes it sound a little choppy but hey that's just me.. i really like how you ended it though, i can almost here a distinctive ring after the last word. good job

[allmeheart]

very nice, that was interesting, the color of the text got my attention, very nice touch the only suggestions i would have made are the same as the post before mine

[Xanthic Flower]

[glow=red,2,300]For some reason when I read a poem I always have to pick out a favorite line. For this poem it's "The devils runs the world down there."

Well done![/glow]

[Only Me]

my favorite line has got to be "I feel like if I tell you things
I’ll have to sell my soul" I love it... I feel this way alot... did i mention that i love it? well I do. the colors only emphasize the point you're trying to get across...