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Post by QueenPaige4 on Aug 17, 2005 19:55:07 GMT -6
Nothing mattered that day just the sun
Nothing has the same beat like that drum
Realizing everything felt like a mistake
Nope not a thing mattered to her but her life
She was always alone
She was always crying
She had no friends
She had no one
Nothing ever mattered that what
she did was a mistake
She never learned from it
For all she was, was dead to the world
Another person walking down the hall
Nobody cared for the girl wearing all black
Who was so pale as the hospital walls
When she died.....
Everyone cared and everything mattered.
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Post by Absinthe on Aug 17, 2005 20:06:06 GMT -6
Short, but poignant....nice job. I liked it. It really kind of just hits you, ya know?
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Post by allmeheart on Aug 20, 2005 14:12:52 GMT -6
i think if u added a line it might make the ending seem a little better, good plot to the poem though
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Post by Only Me on Sept 7, 2005 22:00:53 GMT -6
"When she died.....
Everyone cared and everything mattered." isn't that just how it goes... a person will ignore you most your life but when you die they are the first to get up and speak about what a wonderful person you are and how much they will miss you...
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Sept 8, 2005 16:04:47 GMT -6
yes that is true. And when I die just that will happen. But thank you for your feedback
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Post by Only Me on Sept 18, 2005 10:59:24 GMT -6
well I am sorry, other than my husband, who has no choice but to pay attention to me;), it will probably happen to me as well...
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Sept 19, 2005 13:22:25 GMT -6
I think that it would happen to everyone because just everyone cares about everyone else right?
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Post by Sharon on Sept 23, 2005 16:19:38 GMT -6
[glow=purple,2,300]not sure if you remember this song but it's called "Stole" by Kelly Rowland. i see a similar message here. i like this good job.[/glow]
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Post by Only Me on Oct 2, 2005 0:21:01 GMT -6
good point! well taken!
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Post by Laura on Oct 4, 2005 11:03:55 GMT -6
The message is truthful, and we seem to see it more than we should. People are ignorant and take for granted loved ones or just people they know. Even people that know they are doing so don't seem to care. Blah. Nice message.
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Post by QueenPaige4 on Oct 21, 2005 17:28:19 GMT -6
thank you all
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